IELTS WRITING - Relative clause

·         She is my friend. She works in a bank.

◦     She who works in a bank is my friend.

◦     She working in a bank is my friend.

▪     Cô ý làm việc ở nhà băng là bạn của tôi.

1.      How to reduce relative clause?

Eg:

·         I read a book. It's written by Jim Collins.

◦     I read a book written by Jim Collins.

► At the beginning:

·         Working as a teacher, she finds that life is less competitive than ever.

◦     She who works as a teacher finds that life is less competitive than ever.

·         Located in Hanoi, the restaurant is one of people's interest.

◦     Located in Hanoi, I often visit this restaurant.

2.      Three positions of relative clause

a)      Beginning: Having witnessed people suffer poverty and loss of freedom, Ho Chi Minh decided to leave in search of answer.

b)      Middle:

·         HCM who witnessed

·         People suffer poverty and lost of freedom decided to leave in search of answer.

c)      End: People are working hard for a live which is sufficiently physical and mental.

3.      Line graph

 

            Mệnh đề quan hệ được sử dụng một cách triệt để trong các bài biểu đồ tròn, đường, quy tròn.

Eg:

·         Câu tiền sử: Số lượng trai mại dâm ở lớp cô Lena tăng từ từ vào tháng 1, số lượng đó giữ nguyên không đổi vào tháng 2.

◦     C1: Tăng 1 cách từ từ vào tháng 1, số lượng trai mại dâm không đổi vào tháng 2.

◦     C2: Số lượng trai mại dâm cái mà tăng từ từ vào tháng 1, giữ nguyên không đổi vào tháng 2.

◦     C3: Có 1 sự tăng từ từ vào tháng 1 về số lượng trai mại dâm.

·         Beginning: Gradually going up in February, the number of male prostitutes remains unchange in February.

·         Middle: The number of prostitutes which sees a gradual increase in January stabilizes in February.

·         End:

◦     January sees a gradual climb in the number of ladies of the night which remains the same in February.

◦     There is a gradual climb in the number of ladies of the night in January which remains the same in February.

► Application in Writing task 1:

·         C1: Seeing a stable trend for the first 4 months in 2004, the number of Internet users climbed dramatical during final periods.

·         C2: The quantity of Internet users which saw a stable trend for the first 4 months in 2004 climbed dramatically during final periods.

·         C3:

◦     The first 4 months in 2004 saw a stable trend in the number of Internet users which climbed dramatically during final periods.

◦     There was a stable trend in the number of Internet users in 2004 which climbed.

◦     A stable trend was seen in the number of Internet users in 2004 which climbed dramatically during final periods.

Eg:

·         Topic sentence: First of all, the significant investment in defense can cause economic losses to nations.

·         Supporting idea: North Korea is a stark example. This nation has spent above 70% budget on the army and weapon. It has suffered financial crisis and appealed for fiscal support from the international community.

◦     Beginning: As a stark example, having earmarked 70% of its national budget for the army and nuclear weapon, North Korea has undergone financial crisis and called for fiscal support from the international community.

◦     Middle: For example, North Korea which has allocated 70% of its national budget for army and nuclear weapon has faced financial recession and appealed for fiscal assistance from the international community.

◦     End: For instance, the experience of financial crisis and appeal for fiscal help from the international community are well seen in North Korea which has poured above 70% of its budget into the army and nuclear weapon.

► Application in Writing task 2:

·         C1: Feeling disappointed with bitter failures of their team, some hooligans can hardly control their feeling and attack the visiting players.

·         C2: Some hooligans who are disappointed with bitter failures of their team can hardly control their feeling and attack the visiting players.

·         C3: The inability to control their feeling and attack against the visiting players are seen in some hooligans who are disappointed with bitter failures of their team.

·         C4: Their team bitter failures disappointed some hooligans who can hardly control their feelings and attack the visiting players.

4.      Cause and effect relative clause

            Cấu trúc này được dùng để diễn đạt hành động xảy ra sau trong một bản đồ, biểu đồ đường, quy trình.

 

Eg:       Số lượng người bị bệnh lậu giảm mạnh vào tháng 1, số lượng này giữ nguyên không đổi vào tháng 2, số lượng này tăng vọt vào tháng 3.

·         Cách 1: Giảm mạnh vào tháng 1, số lượng người bị bệnh lậu giữ nguyên không đổi vào tháng 2, tăng vọt vào tháng 3.

·         Cách 2: Số lượng người mắc bệnh lậu cái mà giảm mạnh vào tháng 1, giữ nguyên không đổi vào tháng 2, kết thúc giai đoạn với sự tăng vọt vào tháng 3.

·         Cách 3: Tháng 1 chứng kiến một sự giảm mạnh số người mắc bệnh lậu, cái mà giữ nguyên vào tháng 2, và bị theo đuổi tăng vọt vào tháng 3.

◦     C1: Decreasing strongly in the first month, the number of people with syphilis stay unchanged in the second month, going up quickly in the last month.

◦     C2: The number of people with syphilis which decreases strongly in the first month remains unchanged in the second month, ending the period with a quick rise in the last month.

◦     C3: There is a decrease in the number of people with syphilis which remains unchanged in the second month, followed by a quick rise in the last month.

Eg:

·         Starting with a strong decline for the first 5 years, the number of male smokers fluctuated from 1950 to 1970, ending the period with stable trend.

·         The number of male smokers which underwent a significant decline in the first 5 years fluctuated from 1950 to 1970, followed by a stable trend in the last years.

·         The first 5 years saw a significant drop in the quantity of male smokers which experienced a fluctuation from 1950 to 1970, staying unchanged in the last years.

►Process

	Oxygen
				Coal

 

            In the first stage, coal and oxygen are mixed together in the furnace, producing raw syngas.

►Pie chart

 

            Topic sentence plays the most important part, accounting for 50%, followed by example and supporting ideas, respectively.

►Cause

·         For example, North Korea has suffered financial crisis and appealed for fiscal support from the international community, which come from / is the result of / the consequence of / its allocation of above 70% its national budget for the army and weapon.

·         For example, North Korea has allocated 70% national budget for the army, which leads to their / which is the culprit of / is the reason for / is a contributor to / is responsible for financial crisis and appeal for fiscal support from international community.

Eg:

·         Some hooligans are disappointed with their team's bitter failure, which leads to / responsible for / results in / is a culprit of / is the reason for / is the cause of their inability to control their feelings and attack against the visiting players.

·         Some hooligans can hardly control their feelings and attack their visiting players which comes from / result from / is the consequence of their disappointment about their team's bitter failure.

►NOTE:

·         Biểu đồ đường: Vị trí đầu, giữa, cuối.

·         Chart: line, pie.

·         Process